by
Jack Roth
He loved her. So. She loved him. No. Their fingertips touched. Heat. The fire popped. Amber fly. She began to cry. Cold. He wished all the yesterday’s. Away. She welcomed all the tomorrow’s. Come. They pound the door. Unforgiving fists. He said understanding wasn’t. Welcome. She told him the pain was. Great. He wanted to know. Feel. She. Cut her heart out and handed it to him. Almost. Now he holds her. Heart. And her. Pain.
3 comments:
Jack,
Thanks for sharing this. I like break between words. It finishes the sentence but also moves the story forward.
Jim
interest - differnet - painful - well done
Very emotive. I like the herky-jerkiness of the sentence structure. I like the raw pain of it. Well done!
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