Thursday, February 25, 2010
THE WILTED
by
Michelle Dennis Evans
Features forlorn
Fright frantic
Places unseen
Promises unmet
Dormant dreams
Diagnosis unheard
Image unmet
Fret
Flee
Squirm
Quiver
Blink blurred
Hazy horizon
Humid heaven
Blended behind
Horrid holds
Plucked
Poked
Pointed
Pinned
Deflated
Emptied
Over the rating
Under the radar
Burnt to a crisp
Weathered and wilted.
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7 comments:
Michelle, reminds me of a hot humid day in July in the Midwest. Where you can see the steam rising from the sidewalk.
Hazy Horizon
Humid Heaven
I love it.
Michelle,
Another work of beauty here. Thanks for sharing!
Jim
I feel emotionally wilted, spiritually deflated. Very well done.
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thank you for your comments - :)
There are a few places this verse can take me, very nicely done when the words can transport like that!
Wow. I love how the language here moves in waves. Actually, I think it reminds me more of time-lapse photography in its feel. Wonderful poem.
I just saw that you asked if it was aggressive. It's aggressive in subject matter and with the waves of crisp, short (usually single) words with hard(er) consonants. They, with the meaning of the words, have a type of violence to them. You also have more hazy sounds, which signal confusion and possibly despair. As I said in the post above, it feels like time-lapse photography--with all the startling clarity going so fast and so forcefully (say on a sunny day--but TOO sunny and bright), alternating with haze, yet all with a flow or rhythm of life. Don't know if that helped. That's my very shortly considered assessment. ;)
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