Thursday, February 25, 2010

THE WILTED

by Michelle Dennis Evans Features forlorn Fright frantic Places unseen Promises unmet Dormant dreams Diagnosis unheard Image unmet Fret Flee Squirm Quiver Blink blurred Hazy horizon Humid heaven Blended behind Horrid holds Plucked Poked Pointed Pinned Deflated Emptied Over the rating Under the radar Burnt to a crisp Weathered and wilted.

7 comments:

Cynthia Schuerr said...

Michelle, reminds me of a hot humid day in July in the Midwest. Where you can see the steam rising from the sidewalk.

Hazy Horizon
Humid Heaven

I love it.

Jim_Wisneski said...

Michelle,

Another work of beauty here. Thanks for sharing!

Jim

Nessa said...

I feel emotionally wilted, spiritually deflated. Very well done.

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Michelle said...

thank you for your comments - :)

Joanne said...

There are a few places this verse can take me, very nicely done when the words can transport like that!

Melissa said...

Wow. I love how the language here moves in waves. Actually, I think it reminds me more of time-lapse photography in its feel. Wonderful poem.

Melissa said...

I just saw that you asked if it was aggressive. It's aggressive in subject matter and with the waves of crisp, short (usually single) words with hard(er) consonants. They, with the meaning of the words, have a type of violence to them. You also have more hazy sounds, which signal confusion and possibly despair. As I said in the post above, it feels like time-lapse photography--with all the startling clarity going so fast and so forcefully (say on a sunny day--but TOO sunny and bright), alternating with haze, yet all with a flow or rhythm of life. Don't know if that helped. That's my very shortly considered assessment. ;)